One of the most efficient ways to improve your writing is to edit it for conciseness. You may have been struggling to think ideas through as you wrote, and piled up alternative wordings. Or you may have fallen into the habit of using more words than necessary just to use up space. If you can let your original draft "cool down" a while, you will find it easy to recognize unnecessary words and edit them out. Your reader will thank you! Here are some common patterns of wordiness, with sensible things to do about them.
Doubling of Words (choose one):
mutual agreement (agreement) | future prospects (prospects) |
consensus of opinion (consensus) | reconsider again (reconsider) |
whether or not (whether) | inadvertent error (error) |
Intensifiers, Qualifiers (omit or give specific details):
very | really |
extremely | definitely |
a considerable amount of | to a certain extent |
Formulaic Phrases (use a one-word form or omit):
for the purpose of (to) | due to the fact that (because) |
at this point in time (now) | in the near future (soon) |
with regard to (about) | in view of the fact that (because) |
as the case may be (—-) | Basically, . . . (—-) |
Catch-all Terms (can sometimes omit):
aspect | field | quality |
case | kind | situation |
fact | matter | sort |
factor | nature | thing |
feature | problem | type |
weak | A surprising aspect of most labour negotiations is their friendly quality. |
improved | Most labour negotiations are surprisingly friendly. |
weak | The fact of the war had the effect of causing many changes. |
improved | The war caused many changes. |
Padded Verbs (use a one-word form):
to have an expectation, hope, wish, understanding, etc. |
(to expect, hope, wish understand, etc.) |
to make an arrangement, plan, decision, inquiry, acquisition, etc. |
(to arrange, plan, decide, inquire, acquire, etc.) |
Unnecessary "to be" and "being" (omit):
weak | The program is considered to be effective. |
improved | The program is considered effective OR The program is effective. |
weak | because of the terrain being rough |
improved | because of the rough terrain |
Passive Verbs (change to active voice, if possible with a personal subject):
weak | It is felt that an exercise program should be attempted by this patient before any surgery is performed. |
improved | The patient should attempt an exercise program before surgery. |
improved | I recommend that the patient attempt an exercise program before surgery. |
improved | Mr. Lee, please do these exercises every day for six weeks to strengthen your leg muscles before we try any more surgery. |
weak | The bevelling jig is said by most users to be faulty. |
improved | Most users say the bevelling jig is faulty. |
Overuse of Relative Structures ("Who," "Which," "That") (omit when possible ):
weak | The novel, which is entitled Ulysses, takes place . . . |
improved | The novel Ulysses takes place . . . |
weak | It was Confucius who said . . . |
improved | Confucius said . . . |
weak | I think that X is the case. . . |
improved | X is the case, as this evidence shows: . . . |
weak | There is a tendency among many writers who may be seen to display certain signs of lack of confidence that their sentences will be overloaded with relative clauses and other words which are generally useless in function. |
improved | Many hesitant writers overload their sentences with relative clauses and other useless words. |
http://www.writing.utoronto.ca/advice/style-and-editing/wordiness
Toronto University Writing Support (2014) Retrieved from http://www.writing.utoronto.ca/advice/style-and-
editing/wordiness
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